I read a tweet last week that a good writer could make cleaning your teeth sound great. So in a hopefully surprise twist I’m going to write a story about cleaning your teeth. Whether it’s good or not is up to you guys. This is of course for Rachel Ritchey’s Blog Battle, huge thanks to the boss π
“Go and clean you teeth Will” Mum called to him again. Was it the fourth or fifth time that he had been told to clean his teeth.
“OK mum!” Will shouted back, he didn’t want to be told again because mum would start getting mad now. Reaching for the purple toothbrush, Will carefully squeezed out a stripe of the cool blue paste over the bristles of his brush. He pulled the tap up and wet the brush, then stopped it, then lifted the tap again. He did this several times watching the water swirl down the plug hole. He always liked watching the water disappear like that. He scrubbed his teeth a few times, pulling the brush as he gripped it with his teeth. A long dribble of watery paste dripped down into the sink and was washed away with the water.
Will brushed his teeth a little more, making sure he reached his back teeth and looking at himself in the mirror while he brushed. Will pulled a funny face, scrunching his eyes and nose up. Then he stood there and gripped his toothbrush again waggling it up and down with his mouth. As he swung the toothbrush up he tried to make it touch his nose, but he couldn’t quite make it.
Will slipped the brush out and spat out the white gooey mess into the sink and watched it spin round and disappear down the hole. Will took his toothbrush and made swirly patterns with the paste on the mirror. After a few minutes he stood there and admired his work. Thinking he should clean it off, he stood there an wondered how. With a little tissue he wiped the mirror, but the tissue fell apart with the wet and made the mess worse. In a blinding flash he thought he could use the water from the tap. A handful of water wasn’t enough so turning the tap on full he squirted the mirror and most of the room with an uncontrollable jet of water. He finsihed and turned off the tap, the mirror wasn’t quite clean, but it would have to do.
“C’mon Will haven’t you done yet?” Called his mum “I hope you haven’t made a mess!”
“Coming Mum, no I haven’t!” Will shouted back, beating a hasty exit Β he shut the door behind him.
“Right, lets see those teeth” Will grinned bearing his teeth as he felt a dibble of water at his feet.
“Well done Will, it’s bedtime” Grinning to himself Will followed his mum. Saying nothing about the mess otherwise he might not get his two chapters of Gangsta Granny. During his sleep Will would swear he heard a screech… but he didn’t wake up.
Copyright 2015 Simon Farnell
Very entertaining and fun. I like the “Gangsta Granny” bit at the end there. π I’d like to hear those stories too!
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How could anyone not like those stories? I’m glad you liked it… it was a lot of fun writing it.
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Way to take up a challenge. I used to say I should be able to make paint drying interesting, but I don’t think there’s an entire story in that one. π
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Theres another challenge, that one could be tougher lol
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π π π You captured a tooth brushing kid to a T. Can’t stop laughing at the prankster.
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I always love to rsise a laugh! π
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You were indeed successful. π
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The mess that can be made with a toothbrush and toothpaste is endless. I’ve had it in all sorts of places. π Good story.
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Thank – I’m glad you liked it π
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Gonna look up Gangsta granny for sure. I always wondered why our kid’s bathroom looks the way it does after bedtime, now I know π
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Oh, yes… This is how it happens!! π
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Haha! I totally make faces at myself when I brush my teeth. I’m glad I never went so far as to draw on the mirror with my brush, though! That was highly entertaining. π
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Yay! That compliment means a lot. Thanks βΊ
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π That’s great fun, Simon. I love the details — he loved watching water swirl around down the sink, the shredding of the tissue… Great take on the “reach” prompt. I can’t wait to see all the ways our fellow writers use this one.
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I know, it’s an interesting one is Reach. Have you done one this time? I’ve not seen many of the stories yet, so it will be interesting, but I’m glad you liked it.
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I did write one this week. There were so many choices for “reach”. I was THIS CLOSE to writing a Western. π Mine’s up on my blog but not sure it’s on the battle page yet.
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I think Rachael’s busy so things are taking longer. I’ll have to pass by your blog and find it.
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She is busy for sure. I don’t know how she does it. Thanks. π Hope you like my take.
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Ill let ya know Sarah βΊ
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Where is your story?
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Sorry! I didn’t want to be rude and leave a link to my own blog on yours but since you asked… π It’s here: https://sarahbrentynflash.wordpress.com/2015/10/06/see-emily-play/
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Cool, thanks βΊ
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I wouldn’t have been offended π
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Good to know. π
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Oh goodness, Will sounds just like me as a child. I think he was dead right not to confess all before story time. Gangsta Granny sounds too good to miss π
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I think most of us would have dine the same – Thanks for coming by and reading my story and for taking the time to comment.
Gangsta Granny – go look it up!
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Wonderful Simon and gangster granny…that makes me laugh βΊοΈ
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It’s an actual book – go look it up. Glad you liked the story π
You good?
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Ok! Thanks Simon. Yes I am hangin in :)) long week but atleast tomorrow is Wednesday. How are you?
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Im ok, usual stuff with an odd bit crap thrown in to make life i tetesting lol
How come its a long week for you?
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Long work hours then more to do after so we don’t get home until late- the it’s all about the kids until they lay their heads down- but the night still doesn’t end for this mama bear :)) can we just hit pause? I hear you about the odd crap getting thrown in!
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Sounds like you know all about it too. Its a labour if love, theres no other reason for it. Except madness lol
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Haha yes exactly Simon!
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Lol… Thought you would agree. What do i call you?
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My name is Kristin or SG or Souldiergirl is fine too. Or whatever you want as long as it’s nice lol ;))
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oh, you’re not fussy then? Kristin. darlin’ gorgeous, beautiful and babe would all be fine eh? π
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Yes!!! Ha ;)) Those are all wonderfully accepted with huge smiles ππ
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I thought I was being too cheeky there Kristin. After I sent it I thought, mmm maybe I should have. But if you like that, who am I to stop? lol
Ill see you soon I expect gorgeous, keep smiling babe π
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Well how can I not now?! :))
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Good, just dont grin too much, someone might think you got some lol π
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Ha ha! Very good Simon
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Thank you Lucy, i appreciate it βΊ
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Haha. Who fell?
Keep writing, Simon!
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*I meant “nit-picky” * π
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Love it, that TP mess is a total pet peeve of mine,lol. Im a cancer, they don’t mind a mess but my rising sign of Virgo is super type A and not picky. Loved this, Simon!
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Im glad you liked this. A crab shouldnt mind too much mess as its a sea floor dweller. I love your outlook on life… And yourself βΊ
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Awww! Bless you, kind friend πYou’re awesome!
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Not as awesome as you… π
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Yes, u are!
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Awww… Thanks. We can be awesome together?
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Hahaha delightful read, oh it works alright ^_^
I must confess to having done something quite similar.
Why or why does toothpaste fall off the toothbrush so easily but where it lands mirror, sink, floor, (…clothes)
It instantly changes into some super epoxy raisin wannabe its hell to remove *scream*
~B
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Haha…. Very true!
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ha ha love this! Very nice and I have been there!
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